filth
fricture
stands to ground itself
in image of self
loath to see
grounds a picture of
snip snip slice
in moving reverie
shifts and grows to this
steps sweetly round the point
to prick a picture
flesh a fricture
mix my mixer
please
fracture
stand bridge over mix of air and fluid air
liquid glass panes stand and melt
run coolly down
broken glass cuts and scabs and cuts again
like a border contended
i
broader contender fear all things
equally
and pound out snow
and turn out snow
and move on slow
super cool liquid shows an image
slides as glass
solid fractures
stands to ground itself
in image of self
loath to see
grounds a picture of
snip snip slice
in moving reverie
shifts and grows to this
steps sweetly round the point
to prick a picture
flesh a fricture
mix my mixer
please
fracture
stand bridge over mix of air and fluid air
liquid glass panes stand and melt
run coolly down
broken glass cuts and scabs and cuts again
like a border contended
i
broader contender fear all things
equally
and pound out snow
and turn out snow
and move on slow
super cool liquid shows an image
slides as glass
solid fractures
posted by FireflyEyes at 10:28 am
2 Comments:
To be honest – and I can since I am an anonymous – it is hardly believable that the guy who wrote this piece is an actual aspiring poet. So it is a “contemporary/experimental” piece, but does it mean you should disregard ALL the established rules. To deconstruct something, you must know what was there before the destruction – even teenagers can paint as good as Picasso in his Cubist era , but his brilliance lives in his extensive theory and in his earlier masterpieces. All I’m saying, before dripping your heart on paper, how about learning poetic punctuation, ah?
I'm still learning.
Thanks for the feedback.
I'm not really aspiring to anything now...just trying.
but def still in training.
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